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我们本来约在七点-we had （originally/initially）arranged to meet at 7
even didn't 到反了 she didn't even 。。
不可以用standing by her ，是standing next to her
kept a distance （from）her （at） first，或 initially
i accepted this fact and i have promised - 为什么突然变成用现在式？
surprise 写错，应该是不小心吧
last time i saw her，she （was） 。。
thiner --〉thinner
i was the first she told of her return
i felt so enjoyable -错了 it was so enjoyable 或 i enjoyed it so much
又是过去时态和现在时态混了，要小心
so we went on laughing without the sharp expressiongs in the eyes of people around us （这句肯定错，要表达什么？）
than 和 then ，别搞错
grandfa ？ grandfather 的简写？ 或许你们中国有吧，grandpa 是较常用的
drinked，错- drink，drank，drunk

基本上还通顺，用词上可以慢慢进步
小心时态，

It's too long.

Don't laugh too loud next time!

天，你给我汉语我重新给你翻译一个好了。