哪位老师或英语高手可以帮忙改下句子吗？谢谢

很好，整体来说你的文章还不错，我下面把一些关系词和时态改了一下，希望帮到你解决一些问题。 I have ideas and knowledge,can accept new things quickly ，and like challenges. After Chinese traditional education for 12 years , I yearned for the overseas where paying more attention to quality education, to cultivate students' innovative education system.So after graduating from high school, I chose to go to a university abroad .
I want to be an accountant because I love mathematics and business very much,I am sensitive to the digital, work carefully, and have a certain logical thinking ability and strong sense of responsibility，So I chose the accounting profession。My mother is a acconntants, while My father is a judge .Because of the rapid development of China's economy ,They want me to engage in economic work , therefore,they supported me and gave me a lot of advice about going abroad ,and hoped that I will return to produce China's development.
On one hand,Australia has a high quality education resources, and relatively high safety factor of the state,on the other hand,Macquarie University is one of the best university of business and accounting,And its unique SIBT opened through university diploma course, convenient and time-saving,although I know there will be a lot of difficulties in front of me.At last,I make a study plan。
First, have a good command of English in the shortest possible time, and adapt to the Australian culture, then join the language test into the SIBT learning.After successful completion of SIBT, enter the second grade in University, and the estimated time of completion within 2 years.Finally, read a graduate of MBA.
After the completion of their studies, I will go back to China and find a suitable job, put myself in Australia learn professional knowledge used in the work, I believe Australia will be another starting point of my life, I'll finish school in this beautiful country, and to lay the foundation for future success.

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