高手帮我批改一下这篇英语作文

With the development of the modern society,what will our life be like in future? Perhaps we can live under the sea and on the moon. People don’t have to go out for shopping or seeing a doctor anymore.The internet provides us with conveneint life. And there will be more TV progammers for people to choose.People can also break away from the tiring housework which is helped by robots.Then we will have more time to do other things.With the development of agricuture,people’s diets will be much healthier. Our enviroment will be improved by advanced techenology greatly.As for the space,human beings also make great achievements.

整体没什么问题，围绕一个中心，但条理不是很清楚，应按照科技，农业，生活等方面分开写。

With the development of the modern society,what will our life be like in the future? Perhaps we can live under the sea or on the moon.People don’t have to go out for shopping or seeing doctors anymore.Thanks to the internet for providing us with conveneince in our life.And there will be more TV progammers for people to choose.People can also break away from the tiring housework which can be done by robots.Then we will have more time to do other things.With the development of agricutural ,people's diets will be much healthier. Advanced techenology will improve our enviroment greatly.As for the space,human beings can also make great achievements.

整个文意有点松散，我的一些鄙见。

第一个词应该是As吧，随着嘛，据我的经验是。