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Just like an old saying goes: “ Always studies and no play makes Jack a dull boy!” So, relax is really important and necessary to us.
Just like an old saying goes on改为Just like an old saying goes,
relax is real important and necessary to us改为relaxing is really....
Always studies and no play makes 改为always studying and no playing
用-ing形式做主语
real应该换成really
relax is really.....