请教英语高手帮我修改一下英语复试自我介绍，急用，谢谢了。

Good afternoon, dear professors!
It is my great honor to be here for this interview. My name is xxx. I’m 23years old and I come from a very beautiful Coastal city –青岛。I'll graduate from xxxUniversity in July 2011,and my major is***. Meanwhile, I am aiming for the continuous studies of xx专业 in XX学校.
I have been working diligently which helps me lay a solid foundation for further study and application. I am an energetic man. Therefore I am always interested in fresh things. when facing a setback, I will take an optimistic view . I am also a perseverant person. Once I set a goal, I will fight for it with all my efforts until it is realised. Besides,I am also an easygoing person who enjoys a fine relationship with people around and at the same time, I have good communication skills and team spirit.
In my spare time, I like doing some sports and reading some news. Table tennis and jogging are my favorite sport. They keep me in good health, full of energy and breed optimism towards life. By reading news, I could know what’s going on in the society.
I have long admired XX学校because of its highly qualified faculty and strong academic environment in the field of XX专业。I am confident that I am a very qualified applicant for your subject group.
People always said when you get up in the morning, you have 2 choices: (1) go on sleeping, go on dreaming; (2) get up to pursue your dream. I'll choose the 2nd choice - to pursue my dream. I sincerely hope that you, dear Professors , will grant me a chance to pursue my dream
呵呵后面还没改呢，你先看看吧

I'll be graduated我觉得应该改成 I'll graduat
I'll be graduated with major of " xxx " in xxxUniversity in July 2011. Meanwhile, I am aiming for the continuous studies of xx专业 in XX学校.
这句觉得不太对graduate from
Always I am改成I am always