我在国外上学,可以给你几点建议:
英文里所有的诗都会用到压韵(句尾,句中,句首),暗语(明喻,暗喻),对比...等修饰手法,活用他们,把他们穿插在诗中。
你那同学不会写诗,那是”儿歌”语法。。。
给你开个头吧:
My fifteen at that spring
the one who always dreaming
childlish me, in a endless lovely time
FHDFFDJBMJD
HFGFJ BJ H
FDDSHB GBHJF
RJN TU NTGN
TRGU TU
ITGU TUT.
i was fifth
everyone was fifth
but who is still fifth now,
the ones i played with
you see,
fifth
that's fifth
everyone was
but now one is
that's it
i was fifth
第一次写英文的
短了点,还请指教
i was fifth
mum says
when i was fifth
i was still a little cute girl(boy)(若用boy不押韵)
but i don't think so
i must have been very old
so so long before
because i really can't remember
the days
when
i was fifth