请问我的这一段英文语法上有没有什么错误？

2025-02-17 13:27:15

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回答1：

怎么说呢? 其实你的语法倒没有多大的问题,小问题倒是有,只是我觉得最大的问题是你犯了找工作之大忌.让我来具体的分析一下.

1. 首先,抬头. Mr. Law. 你做为一个陌生人,怎么敢赶直接直呼其姓呢?他和你很熟吗?为什么不加Dear 呢? 千万不要忽视这一点.
2. "I have received your e-mail for 3 days." Receive是瞬间动词,不能写have received. 应该写 I received your e-mail 3 days ago. 或, It has been 3 days since I received your e-mail.
3."I tried to call your Hong Kong cell phone twice but could not contact with you."
你这个contact with,用得不对.我想你是说没取得联系.没有得联系应该说 but could not connect with you.
4."I want to know when will be the suitable time I arrive to shenzhen to join your team."
Mr. law根本就没有答应你给你机会,你为什么就直接问什么时候去深圳呢? 你至少应该问一下,是否有机会之类的话.你说呢?
5. "And I don’t have any special demands on my salary package"
这句话很可怕.什么叫没有什么特别要求.没有特别要求的人,招聘人员都会在心里找一个问号?你应该提出你的要求.要不然别人会认为你很随便,没有主见.

他这次不给你回信,也可能是太忙了.

我就这么多见解了.你可以参考一下.

回答2：

Dear Mr. law,

Many thanks for your reply and appreciation.
I have received your e-mail for 3 days already.
I tried to call your cell phone twice but it couldn't be reached.
I would like to know about what is a suitable time for me to join your team when I touchdown in Shenzen, .
I don’t have any special demands about my salary package since I think that it is not such a big problem.
May you please tell me about how i can contact you for further discussion?

Best regards,

Yours Sincerely

朋友你想的太多了..老板可能是太忙..不会是因为你的英语而不回复

^-^

回答3：

Dear Mr. law,

Many thanks and much appreciation for your reply. I have received your e-mail for three days and I tried to call your Hong Kong cell phone twice but could not get in contact with you. I want to know when will be a suitable time for I to arrive to Shenzhen to join your team. I don't have any specific demands on my salary package and I don't think it is a big problem. Is there any other way to contact with you for more discussion?

Best regards,

respectfully yours,

这样说起来比较顺, 不过跟楼上的一样, 一般老板不会太在意这个的.

回答4：

Good day Mr.Law

Thank you very much for your reply and appreciation.
I received your email 3 days before. I have tried to call your cell phone twice, but I failed. Can you please tell me when is the best time for going to your Shenzhen Co.?
My salary is not a big problem between us. Please contact me after reading my email. Thank you very much!

Thank you and best regards
Hill

回答5：

拙见，仅供参考！

Mr. Law,

Many thanks for your reply. I received your e-mail 3 days ago. And I tried to call you at your Hongkong cell phone number twice, but I could not get through.Could you please tell me what time will be suitable for me arriving in shenzhen and joining your team? And I can accept the salary package you offer to me. I think if I perform well, I will get what I deserve to. When and how I can contact you for your convenience?

Best regards,

respectfully yours,

回答6：

contact sb instead of contact with sb
最好是要一个面试的机会，不要先提不要钱，以下是我写的你参考参考
Dear Mr Law,
Many thanks for your reply!
After the receipt of your email 3 days ago, I tried to call your cellphone twice but failed. So here I write this letter in the hope you can let me know your idea about my job. I really hope you offer me an interview opportunity so that we can discuss details face to face. If you consent to meet me please tell me when will be suitable, I will come visit your Shenzhen office then and give you a call in advance.
Looking forward to your reply!
Best regards
Chris

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