求一篇职位应聘的英文翻译，内容如下

Good afternoon everyone. My name is xxx, 23 years old.I have graduated from Management School of xxx University. My major was Public Enterprises Management.I am glad to be here for your company's position. I am appreciate you give me this chance to show my skills and value. If I succeed, I will work hard and keep developing myself to achieve the best for this position.Thank you!

翻译有所改动。怎么说呢，觉得你要讲的内容太书面了，翻译出来不太口语化。

Good afternoon, everyone examiners, my name is XXX, 23 years old, graduated from XXX university institute of management of the specialty of public enterprises management. Glad to be here for your company's position, also appreciate your company can give me the chance to let I can show oneself, let oneself have a chance of their own value. If I can apply for success, I will work hard to study and progress, and won't let you down in their own positions, oneself value realizes the perfect. Thank you!