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1 some people think schools should only teach students academic knowledge. Others think they should also teach students to judge what is right and wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sending children to school is a common phenomenon for parents, especially /for those in /a competed/competitive society. Education, the main aim of schools, is necessary for students because it allows you to get/get access to high degrees and /well-paid jobs. Some individuals think/maintain that schooling only refers to academic knowledge. By contrast, others maintain/insist that书面语加上that education in school is not only /to teach knowledge but also /to teach/develop judgment. I would like/口语化 to support the latter view. I am supportive of the latter point of view.

2 Environmental problems should be solved with international efforts instead of the effort of one or a few countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Various kinds of pollution are raising countless environmental problems. Since the 20th century, there has been much dispute/debate over which is a better solution for the environmental issues, a worldwide cooperation or some independent endeavors to cope with the problems (government should resolve problems with international effort) 不要用原文，换句话说用自己的话 rather than the awareness of few individuals and the helps of few countries. I totally disagree /with 哪个？this point of view.

3 The life expectancy is longer in many countries. However, there is not enough respect for the elderly people. What are the causes and what are your solutions?
With the sustainable development advancing at a staggering rate, people’s life qualities /has improve/d a lot/substantially. Young people always meet??? their long life expectancy but ignore those elderly people who /are lack of /public concerns. In this essay, I will discuss this situation and find solutions to cornbat???.

有进步。第一段尽量写得丰满点，结构可以是背景+双方观点转述（你的话）+你的立场观点。注意用词，最好要少用口语化词汇，多用书面语。尽量在第一段就展现你的长句和较高级词汇。

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