高中的英语作文，请英语老师帮忙看一下哪有语法错误或者有错误的地方告诉我一下，如何修改的更好谢谢老师

第1段
more and more students are home from work everyday because ...
First 改成 Firstly或 At first First 不能单独用
Second 改成 Secondly
parent +S
problem 问题，习题（数字，事实方面） 应该+S
search it with computer...改成 search for the answers with the help of computer...
第2段
people 改成 students
...they think that it is a good chance for them to communicate with each other and cultivate their teamwork 你那句人称好像乱了
最后那句 Our 改成 their
最后一段
as far as i concerned （好像是)
living on school改成 campus
which can never be learnt at home 应被动

个人观点 请参考 呵呵

live live in home 你想表达在家住吗？我觉得live at home 更好些吧。parent改为parents。problem改为problems或者difficulty。

如果是高中生的话，写的不错。

parent----parents
problem---problems
it-----them