我的英语介绍 大家帮忙看一下有没有错误

初次见面就用Dear不太好
introduce myself to you.to you 省略
years old
lively outgoing sunshine girl.形容词太多了就1个够了
.l love to challenge everything改成i love the challenge
My Features is smile
Before difficulties,I never hide,改成i will not weasel from the difficult
I always move forward bravely改成i have an acquisitive mind
Sunshine Is Always After Stormy Rain 最后一句，呵呵，，同学努力吧

Hello, dear teachers
I'm glad to stand here and introduce myself. My name is Fu Yurong. I'm 16 years old. I am a lovely,outging and sunny girl. I love to challenge everything.Smile is my most attractive characteristics. Whenever facing the difficulties, I always move forward bravely.Because I believe that the sunshine is always after the trials and hardship.
有问题的地方都帮你改了，有些句子的结构也做了调整，使其更符合英语的使用习惯，可以放心说了。祝你好运！

hello ，dear teachers
I'm so gald to be standing here to introduce myself .

My name is fuyurong and l'm 16 years old.

I'm outgoing ,vigorous and passionate.

l love to challenge myself with many new things.

One of my main character is my empressive smile.

I will never coward before difficulties and challenges.

Instead, I will always move forward bravely.

Because l believe that every cloud has a silver line(此为谚语).

I sincerely hope that I will have the oppotunity to be a part of your company~

Thank you!

love to challenge改成like to challenge吧，你的介绍已经很好了哦，其实正如你说的，当你面试的时候，能给老师们一个很好的微笑，和从容不迫并且冷静淡定的态度，应该就不错了哦 祝你好运哦

1 hello dear teachers 最好说成hello everyone 不因为别的 习惯所致 美国人说话不那么尊师重道的
2 I'm 16 years old.
3 I'm a I'm a lively outgoing sunny girl.
3 Before difficulties,I never hide是在说我从不逃避困难吗 那应该是 I never run away from difficulties
4 阳光总在风雨后 或者 经历风雨才见彩虹的英语俗语说法是 Every Mountain Has a Peak 或者After Storm There Always Comes Sunshine