孩子作文就像流水账没有条理该怎么办?

2025-03-14 12:45:42
推荐回答(2个)
回答1:

孩子写作文像记流水账怎么办?
很多家长都提到:孩子的作文就像流水帐,一点重点也没有。
孩子也很困惑:我们明明写作文时写了好多内容和故事情节,修改了好多次,可老师的评语中仍然是“文章内容太空洞,重点不突出。”
上述情况很常见,孩子的作文中到底缺什么呢?其实孩子的作文中缺的不是故事情节和事例,缺少的是他们没能够突出重点,把其中的重点内容写具体。
而作文像流水帐、内容空洞表面上看是文章重点不突出,其实是孩子没有把握住什么是重点内容,什么应该具体写。抓不住重点,孩子就不可能知道怎样突出重点。
?怎样才能把握住作文的重点呢?
在平时的作文训练中,往往就某一个题目让学生去完成作文,孩子只学会了这个题目的作文怎么写,能抓住这个题目的写作重点,但是看到其他题目还是抓不住重点。也就是说,我们的孩子在平时的学写作文的过程中,存在着“只见树木,不见森林”的现象。在学而思的新作文教材中,不是围绕某一篇文章学习怎么写,而是围绕某些共性的问题来讲解,解决的是这一类作文的重点。经过训练之后,孩子学会的也不再是如何写出某一篇作文的重点,而是学会如何写出某一类作文的重点。也就是说,孩子可以不知道作文的题目是什么,但他肯定知道写作文的重点是什么。如:在叙事类的文章中,事情的经过或者说是高潮是重点;在写人的文章中,需要重点表现出人物的精神、品质,那么人物的事例就是重点;在写景的文章中,哪处景物让你印象最深,最能吸引人,那就是重点。

回答2:

引导孩子多看一些小小说,尝试仿写一些小文章,慢慢的就会有好转!

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