写了篇托福作文 不知是否能帮忙批改一下呢？ 感激不尽～

题目2：In a team, those who do not accept other’s criticism cannot succeed.To begin with, it is universally acknowledged that by denying diverse perspectives, the group members will be deprived of the ability to think comprehensively and critically which is a key determinant of success for a team. As we know, there is no one but longs to consider completely when we make plans as a team. Hard as we work, the imagination and horizon of each individual is limited. Besides, people usually cannot assess their proposal objectively. But for accepting ideas from different individuals, we could not have realized the shortcomings of our suggestions, let alone coming up with a perfect plan. So why not be open to different ideas?Another equally important reason is that it will stifle the creativity and imagination of team members, which is an essential element for success of a team. I cannot emphasize the significance of the communication among people holding different perspectives. By that I mean, nothing is more important than to communicate with and learn from different individuals. By combining various traditional ideas, we can put forward a new plan which we have not seen before. That means the more opinions team members adopt, the closer the group is to success. A good case in point is that accepting and combining different ideas, Steve Jobs devised an epoch-making product, called IPAD, changing the way people living and thinking dramatically. What a great job he did! Hence, it pays to absorbing diverse ideas.Admittedly, different opinions may cause tension and conflicts between group members. However, it offers them a precious opportunity to understand each other better, which tends to strengthen/consolidate/enhance/cement overall relationship between group members. Therefore, I reinforce my standpoint to support that the success of a team is largely dependent upon the willingness of acceptance of different ideas.

你好！大致看了一下这篇文章，我个人感觉思路还是不错的。加油！