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你同意有更少的汽车20年后？
我同意说将来会有比现在更少的汽车。原因很多，有助于促进的汽车数量将逐渐减少，20年后的因素，我会提出我的意见分为3个不同的方面详细解释这篇文章来巩固它。
首先，它是注意技术的意义的本质。我们大家都知道，技术始终是社会进步的重要部分。坦率地说，汽车实际上是由于在科学创新的快节奏的现代技术的发明。今天，我们的汽车已经出现一个巨大的飞跃，功能比较的时代，卡尔奔驰发明了人类与# 039第一辆车的历史。因此，毫无疑问，汽车将继续在这非停滞的改进技术的发展。当技术最终铺平进入一个转折点，新员工开始出现，这是我们作为人类的想象，有长约的飞行机器可能最终取代了汽车。
另一个因素在于环境的后果。环境实际上已经变成了一个令人担忧的问题，人类自工业革命以来。我们的是，大自然以及自然资源短缺的严重污染问题逐渐引起。汽车是一个怪因为二氧化碳吨每年排放的。当我们# 039；已经提出了我们的本性是面临的严峻形势的认识，我们可以采取其他交通工具如自行车代替汽车。
同时，我需要指出的是，汽车对石油的依赖，石油钻井是一个最困难的事情由于下降和稀缺的石油资源。因此，有一种可能性，20年后，许多国家将在石油需求量很大。与此同时，石油价格指数将继续上升，这将成为许多人负担不起，汽车的数量可能会变得越来越小。
总之，我是支持点，会有更少的汽车20年后，当我与# 039所有的问题都可以通过以上。
中文意思是这样吗？
你同意有更少的汽车20年后？
Do you agree that 20 years later there were fewer cars?
我同意说将来会有比现在更少的汽车。原因很多，有助于促进的汽车数量将逐渐减少，20年后的因素，我会提出我的意见分为3个不同的方面详细解释这篇文章来巩固它。
I agree that the future will than there are now fewer cars. For many reasons, contribute to promoting the car will gradually reduce the number of factors, 20 years later, I will put forward my opinion is divided into 3 different aspects of a detailed explanation of this article is to consolidate it.
首先，它是注意技术的意义的本质。我们大家都知道，技术始终是社会进步的重要部分。坦率地说，汽车实际上是由于在科学创新的快节奏的现代技术的发明。今天，我们的汽车已经出现一个巨大的飞跃，功能比较的时代，卡尔奔驰发明了人类与第一辆车的历史。因此，毫无疑问，汽车将继续在这非停滞的改进技术的发展。当技术最终铺平进入一个转折点，新员工开始出现，这是我们作为人类的想象，有长约的飞行机器可能最终取代了汽车。
First of all, it is the essence of the meaning of the note technology. As we all know, technology is always an important part of social progress. Frankly, the car is actually because of modern technology in the scientific innovation and the fast pace of invention. Today, our car has been a great leap forward, function more times, Carle Benz invented the first car in the history of mankind and. Therefore, there is no doubt, the car will continue in the development that is not stagnant technology improvement. When the technology to pave the way to enter a turning point in the final, new employees began to appear, this is we as the human imagination, there are about flying machines could eventually replace the car.
另一个因素在于环境的后果。环境实际上已经变成了一个令人担忧的问题，人类自工业革命以来。我们的是，大自然以及自然资源短缺的严重污染问题逐渐引起。汽车是一个怪因为二氧化碳吨每年排放的。当我们；已经提出了我们的本性是面临的严峻形势的认识，我们可以采取其他交通工具如自行车代替汽车。
Another factor is that environmental consequences. Environment has actually become a worrying problem since the industrial revolution, human. We are, nature and serious pollution problems of lack of natural resources has caused. The car is a strange because carbon dioxide tons per year emissions. When we; have proposed our nature is the understanding of the grim situation faced, we can take other vehicles such as bicycles instead of cars.
同时，我需要指出的是，汽车对石油的依赖，石油钻井是一个最困难的事情由于下降和稀缺的石油资源。因此，有一种可能性，20年后，许多国家将在石油需求量很大。与此同时，石油价格指数将继续上升，这将成为许多人负担不起，汽车的数量可能会变得越来越小。
At the same time, I need to point out is, dependence on oil for cars, oil drilling is one of the most difficult things due to declining and the scarcity of oil resources. Therefore, there is a possibility, after 20 years, many countries will be much in demand for oil. At the same time, the oil price index will continue to rise, it will become a lot of people can't afford, the number of cars may become more and more small.
汽车虽然是21世纪最重要的交通工具，但它有许多弊端。
Although the car is the twenty-first Century the most important traffic tool, but it has many disadvantages.
汽车污染是由汽车排放的废气造成的环境污染。可以说，汽车是一个流动的污染源。在世界各国，汽车污染早已不是新话题。20世纪40年代以来，光化学烟雾事件在美国洛杉矶、日本东京
Automobile pollution is the environmental pollution caused by the exhaust gas from cars. Can say, the car is a mobile pollution sources. In the world, the automobile pollution has already not a new topic. Since the nineteen forties, photochemical smog event in the United States, Japan Tokyo Losangeles
汽车排气管排出内燃机废气
Automobile exhaust waste gas of internal combustion engine
等城市多次发生，造成不少人员伤亡和巨大的经济损失！
City has occurred many times, causing many casualties and huge economic losses!
进入21世纪，汽车污染日益成为全球性问题。随着汽车数量越来越多、使用范围越来越广，它对世界环境的负面效应也越来越大，尤其是危害城市环境，引发呼吸系统疾病，造成地表空气臭氧含量过高，加重城市热岛效应，使城市环境转向恶化。
Entered in twenty-first Century, the automobile pollution has become a global problem. With the increasing number of cars, the use of more and more widely, its negative effect on the world environment is more and more serious, especially the city environmental harm, cause respiratory system disease, causing high ozone content of surface air, urban heat island effect is aggravating, the deterioration of environment to the city.
总之，我是支持点，会有更少的汽车20年后，当我与所有的问题都可以通过以上。
In short, I support point, after 20 years there will be fewer cars, when I and all problems can be through the above.
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Do u agree that there are fewer cars 20 years later?
I agree with the argument that there will be fewer cars in the future than today. Many reasons serve to contribute to the factor that the number of cars will decrease gradually 20 years later, and I will present my views into 3 different aspects in a detailed explanation in this essay to solidify it.
To begin with, it is essential to notice the significance of technology. As it is known to us all, technology always plays an instrumental part in the advancement of society. Frankly speaking, cars are actually the inventions of modern technology due to the fast-paced innovations in science. Today, our cars have already made a huge leap in appearance, functions compared to the era when Karl Benz invented the first car in human's history. So, there is no doubt that cars will continue to develop in this non-stagnant improvement of technology. When technology eventually paves its way into a turning point, new staffs begin to emerge, that is something we, as humans have long imagined about flying machines which may eventually take the place of cars.
Another factor lies in the consequence of environment. Environment has actually turned into an alarming issue for humankind since the revolution of industry. We are slowly evoked by the fact that Mother Nature is suffering from serious pollution problems as well as shortages in natural resources. Cars are the one to blame since tons of carbon dioxide are emitted by them every year.When we've raised the awareness of the serious situation our nature is facing, we may take other transportation such as bicycles as a substitute for cars.

Also, I need to point out that cars rely on oil, and oil-drilling is becoming one of the most difficult things to do due to the decline and rareness in oil resources. Therefore, there is a possibility that 20 years later many countries will be in a great demand of oil. In the meantime, the price of oil will continue to rise exponentially, which will become less affordable to many people so that the numbers of cars may become smaller.
All in all,I am in favor of the point that there will be fewer cars 20 years later as all the issues I've mentioned in the essay above.