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Based on analysis of the present situation and development of China electronic commerce(英联邦国家多用，electronic business美国多用,酌情选择),the paper draws the conclusions that the development of potential consumers is at a surprising rate in terms of China e-commerce at the present, but there still exist many deficiencies. Combined with the present situation of chinese household electrical appliance industry and compared with the e-commerce business model of GoMe, it presents constructive proposals for the future development of GoMe, analyses the prospects of GoMe electric appliance sales as well.Finally, although there are several deficiencies,it is still optimistic for the future development of GoMe,the paper also indicates that the e-commerce development of GoMe will promote the formation towards subdivisible development of e-commerce industry.

另外根据楼上所说,提出一点异议:
10、 注意事项。应避免一些常见的错误。
冠词。主要是定冠词the易被漏用。the用于表示整个群体、分类、时间、地名以外的独一无二的事物、形容词最高级等较易掌握，用于特指时常被漏用。这里有个原则，即当我们用the时，听者或读者已经确知我们所指的是什么。例如：The author designed a new machine.The machine is operated with solar energy.

摘自:《EI》对英文摘要的写作要求
由此可以看出,英文摘要中是可以用the author,the paper做主语.

新摘要翻译如下:
Abstract:Now China e-commerce is developing in an unprecedented pace, this paper analyzes the present situation of China electronic commerce and household electrical appliance industry, focused on analyzing the e-commerce operation model of GoMe:its shopping patterns and payment model;the e-commerce system of GoMe:its whole system, network platform and online payment.Then it presents some suggestions for the e-commerce of GoMe: utilizing new sales models such as telephone direct marketing, establishing search engines, framing a new pattern BforC.Finally,the paper dissertates on the prospects of GoMe e-commerce and the trend of its future development.
Keywords : e-commerce, operation model, model analysis

手译,刚刚看了一篇规范,在英语的文献摘要里,the author, the paper不可以作主语,试着译了一下,呵呵.还真不习惯.
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本文通过对我国电子商务发展及现状分析，得出目前，我国的电子商务方面，潜在消费者的发展速度惊人，但尚有许多不足之处的结论。
In this paper, through the analysis on the development and present situation of Chinese electronic business, conclusions are made that certain deficiencies still exist in this field though the potential consumers grow with surprising speed.

再结合我国家电行业电子商务现状对比国美家电的电子商务运营模式，提出对国美电器今后发展的建议。
Furthermore, on the basis of the comparison between the present situation of electronic business in Chinese household electrical appliances industry and that in the U.S.A, suggestions are put forward for the future development of Gome.

并对国美家电销售电子商务进行前景分析，最后终结出虽然还存在不足之处，但对国美电器今后的发展表示乐观，并且预示着国美电子商务的发展将推动电子商务行业细分化发展趋势的形成。
Finally, with the prospective prediction on the electronic business of Gome, despite deficiencies, it is optimistic for its further advancement which suggests that Gome will promote the trend towards industrial subdivision of electronic business.

this article gives the conclusion about by far ,the potential consumers of E-business will grow very fast , but there are still much things should be improved by the analysis of E-business in china now .And then comapre the situation of today's E-business in china to the operation model of E-business in USA now, so the articlle conclude some suggestions about the development of E-business in American. Moreover, it also analyize the prospect of American E-business, finally , it concludes that it is good for the future of E-business in American although there are still many areas need to pay attention, and it forcasts that the development of the E-business will promote E-business this a line of business goes to many branches.

摘要：
the development of E-business in China is fast then ever before,this article analyizes the situation of E-business in China now and electron in family, stress on the analysis of GUOMEI electron operation model and the system of E-business. And the operation model is :purchase model and selling model.The system of E-business is :system ,plant of internet and purchase on-line.The suggestions of GUOMEI E-business are:adopting new direct promotion such as telephone promotion, establishing the search engine,building the BforC new model.Finally, discusses the prospect of GUOMEI E-business and the future plan.

本文通过对我国电子商务发展及现状分析，得出目前，我国的电子商务方面，潜在消费者的发展速度惊人，但尚有许多不足之处的结论。
This text, through analysing to the development of e-commerce of our country and current situation, draw it at present, e-commerce of our country, potential consumers' development speed is surprising, but still there are the conclusions of a lot of weak points.
再结合我国家电行业电子商务现状对比国美家电的电子商务运营模式，提出对国美电器今后发展的建议。
And then combine the e-commerce operation mode that my national electric trade e-commerce current situation compares with the American electrical home appliances of the country, put forward the suggestion that will be developed to Guomei electrical appliance in the future.
并对国美家电销售电子商务进行前景分析，最后终结出虽然还存在不足之处，但对国美电器今后的发展表示乐观，并且预示着国美电子商务的发展将推动电子商务行业细分化发展趋势的形成。
Sell to country American electrical home appliances e-commerce carry on prospect analyse, is it appear though for weak point to end finally, but show optimism to the development in the future of Guomei electrical appliance, and indicate the development of country's American e-commerce will promote the forming of the sectionalization development trend of e-commerce trade.

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