雅思大作文求批改 并帮忙看一下有多少分

你问两次，瓦就把答案照搬过来。谢谢给分。呵呵。

7-7.5 分

条理很清楚，论证很明确，句式用词相对多样化，这些都是优点。很好。第二段写得比第三段好。
但是，还是有些用词不够精准，语法小错误，例如
1. to precise --> to be precise
2. 第三段的第二个分点虽然我能理解，但是表述不够地道, 文化理解不到位：各个州或省在教育经费安排上有自己的权利; 而且很多研究资金也用于解决教育funding的问题。
Furthermore, theoretically the federal government is in charge of the nation-wide resource allocation, but the specific implementation happens at the state level. Individual state government has their own respective priorities and challenges. The decision on whether or not and how much to fund the education should be left to state government. The local governments should make responsible decisions based on the holistic inspection of the education objectives and plans of action.

Additionally, the federal government provides tremendous amount of funding in teaching and research annually. These funds may turn into financial aids for those who are more qualified. In return, these receivers get free college education. The selective investment may bring back more quality returns.

Take everything into consideration, it is my belief that the government and the students themselves should.... This may be achieved by government offering and assigning funds to individual states, the state government .... ....

6.5吧
还是蛮多wrong words和语法上的问题的
good luck

想要学好英语必须有三心：

一.必须有足够的信心，坚信你一定可以学好英语。不要吝啬自己的嘴，在众人面前要敢于开口，不要怕说错；

二.必须有决心，英语要学好也不容易，必须准备花足够的时间下苦功；

三.要学会做个有心人，看到街上的英文招牌或网上的英文缩写，你有没有去想过它的全称？
比如BBS大家常去过吧，但它的全称Bulletin Board System 你知道吗？

另外多听听一些过来人的学习经验，相信会对你有所帮助
还有建议你去补习班去听一下老师的经验 应该会对你有所帮助的补习班推荐去WÌZBEE

6.5应该没问题。开头写的不错，文章结构也可以，完全折中式，正反各三条论点。最后一段总结观点。

你可以去搜“新东方批改网”，这个是提供专业批改服务~反正页面很精美，价格也……唉，如果不是打折期去批改的话，就心痛死人了……不过毕竟是外教，质量很不错，如果你基础不太好，语法错误比较多，那就找这里批改。但是你在网上和这些外教交流提问的时候也得用英文，憋死我了T T 他们有三个级别的批改标准，楼主斟酌吧~

最后祝楼主好运！