求英语达人帮忙翻译一段简介

你的译文还有很大进步的空间。
首先你的汉语逻辑就有点小问题。
篮球职业化，nba的影响是我国篮球市场火爆的原因，姚明只是推动了这个火爆。
Together with the influence of NBA, the influence that was reinforced by the first pick of 2002 NBA Draft, Yao Ming, the development of Chinese Basketball Association（CBA）and its full professionalisation have boosted basketball a booming business(不要看到市场就是market).In this context, journalism related to basketball has seen its propsrity. Publications in this respect have been popular: as many as more than ten periodicals being “Stuff Inside NBA”, SLAM”, ”Dime”,” Basketball Club”,” Basketball” and so forth and three main newspapers(这里指种类，报纸就可数了) being “Basketball Pioneers”” Basketball News China”and ”51 MVP’.
Compared with basketball perodicals’ professional and high-end style,(所谓“化”是汉语中最难翻译的一种表现之一) the style of basketball newspaper is amateur and unexpensive, （前后逻辑关系）thus resulting in more issues and larger popularity.Hereby, through the analyses and comparison of three newspaper， the essay aims to confirm its strong points and beneficial experience on the one hand and attempts to position its drawbacks in its development on the other hand, trying to offerconducive point-of-views and suggestions to basketball newspaper, the newly-born genre in the history in China’s media industry.

你的译法有很多诟病...

Since drafted by Houston in the First Round (first pick overall) of the 2002 NBA Draft -->
Since Yao Ming joined NBA as a rookie champion in 2002,
[言简意骸]

NBA hot --> NBA-holic (对NBA的热衷者) [例如: shopaholic - 购物狂]

our basketball market is hotting --> hot [没有hotting的说法]

Go to a newspaper stand, you will find... (到贩报摊, 你将发现..)
Take a look in a newspaper stand, you can find...
(到贩报摊转转, 你会发现..)
[这个译法更符合意译]

In this context, the related commercial reports of basketball game was molded -->
In this environment, the related magazines are riping
[你的译法很累赘, 也不正确]

晚点再替你看看, 先睡觉..

In 2002 has allied NBA since Yao Ming by the beautiful foremost person in the field status, raises China's all the people NBA to be hot, in addition the domestic CBA league tournament's professionalism day after day develops, our country basketball market is hot gradually. Under this environment, the related basketball reported that the marketability also gradually takes shape, transfers a revolution of book newsstand, various types basketball class magazine, "Fills Basket" "Slam dunk" "the Basket World" "Basketball Club" "Basketball" and so on numerous ten several kinds, the newspaper aspect, by "Basketball Cutting edge Newspaper", "Basketball Newspaper", "Sports World MVP" three carves up the market. The relative basketball class magazine's specialization, the high-quality goods, the basketball class newspaper common people, the price is more inexpensive, the quantity issued is bigger, is more popular, this article from to the nowadays release's three kind of basketball newspaper's comparison and the analy

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Since yao 2002 for joining the NBA draft, since China's national NBA hot, and domestic CBA league professional basketball in China market, growing development gradually surging. In the circumstances, the basketball related reports also gradually shaping, marketization, a basketball magazine kiosks, "Slam Dunk" basket "dunks the basketball club of the basketball" dozen, various aspects of the newspaper, minn., basketball, basketball, sports and divided three MVP "market. Relative to the professional basketball magazine, newspaper, basketball class products more accessible, and lower prices, circulation bigger, more popular, based on the three basketball today issued the comparison and analysis of the newspaper, the achievements and experience at the same time, this paper tries to analyze the shortcomings in them, thus to basketball newspaper this in our history is long professional media reports on the beneficial.