In the winter, we could often see the snow. Like many small stars,cleaning and pure,Patches of the snow are very popular among people ,especially kids who enjoy playing in the snow.They roll in the snow or make snowmen, while more of them lose themselves in snowball fights。So do I .though being soaked from head to foot sometimes, I am not worried, because I have fall in love with the snow!
楼上那位的语法错误太多了,而且很多是较低级的错误啊。。呵呵,是不是说得太直接拉,不过我也只是在他的基础上修正语法,修饰句式罢了。
说实话,这篇文章很难写啊,因为文本本身就写的太幼稚了,没有层次感与柔美性。(如果是小学生或初一学生的话,就当我此话没说,sorry。。)希望你能满意。
In the winter, we could often see the snow.Patches of the snow are like many small stars,which are perfectly clean and pleasing。 The kids enjoy playing in the snow, they often roll in the snow or make snowmen, but More children lose themselves in snowball fights,so do I。I often with partners fight in the iceland, and sometimes be soaked from head to foot, but I am not worried, because I like the snow!
水平有限时间仓促,若有不足请你在改正一下吧
In winter, we often see snow, flakes are like little shining stars, white and lovely. Children love to play with snow, they normally roll in the snow field or make a good looking snowman, but more children prefer playing snow fight. I am also fond of playing snow fight, and I always play snow fight with my young fellows in snow day, and get myself all wet if I do not pay enough attention to the coming snow ball. However, I am not worry too much about being hit by snow ball because I love snow.
In winter, we could often see snow. The snowflakes look like stars in the sky, white and flawless. Children like playing with snow best, they often roll on the snow or make snowmen. But more children like
throw snowballs, I also like it, and usually play snowball with friends when it snows. Sometimes I was not carefull and got myself wet, but I don't care about it because I like snow! 但愿能帮到你