这几句中文翻译成英文的正确性？

以下是本人的版本，呵呵

Hide not the truth. 告诉我真相。
why did you escape from our game? 为什么不与我一起玩这个游戏？
The only question I have, is whether our love still alive? 我想知道：你是否爱我。

Miss you day and night, though it hurts. 我日日夜夜思念着你。
And I know our love has fell like autumn leaves. 我知道你的爱已经离我远去。
But I still remember you and wait. 但是我一直记得你，等待着你。

When I lost your love. 当我失去了你的爱。
I only belong to the world of darkness, 我只能呆在黑暗的世界之中。
where love, hope, light are all meaningless words. 没有爱 没有希望 没有光

Everything has changed but my love for you. 一起都改变了，除了我对你的爱
Maybe I am not perfect in the eyes of yours. 也许我有很多缺点
And beatiful may not be a description for me from the mouth of you. 也许我并不美丽。
But... 但是……
Please come back. 请回来。
Please return my love, the very love between me and you! 请把属于我的爱还给我！

个别地方为了押韵，稍稍异于普通语法。

Everything has changed without my love for you. 没有我对你的爱，一切都改变了。
其余很不错。

I only stay at the world of darkness.文艺点的话就翻成黑暗将我吞噬

Everything has changed without my love for you. 没有了我对你的爱，一切都已改变。

I'm only living in the world of darkness. 我只能呆在黑暗的世界之中。
NO LOVE NO HOPE NO LIGHT 没有爱 没有希望 没有光
Everything has changed, except for my love to you. 一起都改变了，除了我对你的爱。
Maybe I have some weaknesses. 也许我有很多缺点。