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(In nowadays), high-school education in China usually have two focuses that are humanity focus and science focus.When we become senior school students,we have to face (with a choice in deciding which focus to undertake before entering different subject fields).(In my aspect) it is difficult to (reach) a wisdom decision,I always (disagree with the division of two focuses in high-school education.)
First of all, senior school students (are mostly in their seventeens or eighteens,thereby to my opinion) it is too young for them to make a right choice, they (probably only have a vague concept of) humanity and science (in their minds). Usually, the choice (made by) young students (may) reflects the aspiration of their parents, not (of their own). But the long road towards the fields they choose must be completed step by step by young students not their pairents.Hence, it is not (wise) to have two focuses in Chinese high-school education. In addition (to my thesis), interdiscipline is complementary. The senior school students (need) more information in different fields to broaden their horizons. With the rapid development of our society, interdisciplinary interpenetration (gradually becomes) a trend. Because of this, it is not necessary to make two focuses in Chinese high-school education.
Finally, based on the above (statement) I (demonstrated), I believe there shouldn`t be two focuses available in Chinese high-school education.However, the aspiration of senior school students and trend of our society should be (taken into consideration) when we make an important (choice regarding to the existence of) two focuses in Chinese high-school education.

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